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Abstract

The author that wrote this article works for onedirt.com. He discusses what makes a great driver in this article. He writes about three different drivers that all hail from Orange, CA. and the things that they have accomplished to tag them as great drivers. I am writing about one of the drivers in his article. "Robby Gordon"

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The target audience in this article is the race fan, by giving only headline news on the appointed driver chosen for this article (Robby Gordon). I think the writer could have dipped in a slightly different direction, maybe go into the past a little bit more. Dietzsch, C. onedirt.com (Robby grew up in Orange, CA. By age 8, he was racing motorbikes, and as soon as he turned 16, he jumped behind the wheel of a car. He has won in almost everything he has driven.) However, I understand why he did not when you are writing about two other drivers the information needs to be to the point. All he mentioned was all the wins; he never really touched on the names of the tracks at which he spent most of his time. In my opinion, this would have changed the direction to appease his hometown friends and family only. The author in the beginning of the story lost me for about five sentences, but picked me back up and I was entertained for the rest of the article. The author was a little bias, in the area of choosing drivers from his hometown, which in my opinion does not lay out the true great drivers. There are many great drivers in the US and abroad, that would better fit the mold of the greatest driver. There was information I would have liked to see that was not in the article. I know that this particular driver had some real bad accidents and I would have liked to read about those as well. I do not feel the author left this information out intentionally, because it was a very well written story, with the content he shared.

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The language was very understandable, and it has to be because of the target audience. His sentence structure was fine. However, he did miss a few commas and semi colons.

Overall, it was a great read. He did not compare drivers much he did mention Dale Earnhardt in one paragraph; (Every race fan remembers Earnhardt's "pass in the grass.) However if he really wanted to make a great story he would have researched allot more similarities between the driver

he chose and other great drivers of the same caliber, however, the author did depict the drivers he chose very well. There was no real cause and effect, however one could say the cause is all the press those particular diver gained over the years, and the effect would be the article I'm-reading right now, because if the drivers never had all the press they have had over the years this writer would be writing about someone else.

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References

Curtis Dietzsch

What Makes A Great Driver

Pictures in this project were from the article I have written about onedirt.com

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